Opening sentence for my story

Hello readers we are learning to write an interesting first sentence to hook our reader   

my first sentence

  "was a boy named john playing his game and his mum gets home "

my second sentence was 

"It was a dull day a boy name john got home from school 

straight away he got on his video game bang  bang "

i think my updated sentence is more exciting then my old sentence

leave some advice in the comments for next time

dance algorithm

Hello bloggers this is my blog post our dance algorithm   with my buddy   Taylor
we have been making our own dance


Taylor 

he is the tester he has to read the instructions

i am the bot i do the dance moves  that Taylor tells me to do

a  algorithm is a line of instructions 

leave any ideas or what you think  in the comments  

kakapo

Greetings  peoples in reading this week me and my buddy Casper  have been learning about kakapo  this is what we have done. i think we have done a good job leave a comment about what you think we would like if you gave us some feedback here is a link to my reading site reading page link  what we had to do is learn about new Zealand  endangered  birds  and about who helps them  thank you for taking the time out of your day to read my blog. 

toy plans

Me and my buddy have been working on a toy invention. We have been making a board game

like monopoly but with catapults and money guns and instead of planes and boats trains where using cars. We have to color it up. My buddie is is jherean we would like it if you could leave a comment about what you think  

Colour poem

Hello everyone  is my colour poem that i have been working on.The colour that  I picked is orange I picked orange because it makes me feel calm. Thank you for reading my blog 

returning back to school

The night before school i was  very very shy   i  went to make a snack and my  lunch for school . Because i   was really shy to go back to school . And then i  went to sleep. but when i   woke up i   was kinda looking ford to going back to school and then when i got to the school gate i  was so excited and when i  got in the class i  was more excited when i got to see my friends and play manhunt with most of most of my friends 

draft 1

hello i am going to share my draft 1 out of 2 our teacher gave us work to do it was writing about going back to school i was really shy to come back to school but now that i'm back at school i'm  excited  i would really like to now how i could improve it  bye