show don't tell writing

kia ora  bloggers i'm going to show you my writing and my photo that i made we have been learning about show don't tell witch means  show your feelings not tell this is my writing leave a comment what you think

I  was scattering around the moon trying not to get catched by the aliens and
to top it off  the no gravity i decided to jump in one of the holes the I seen in
front of me I took a big leap and landed in the hole the aliens  ran straight
past me I climbed up and got out of the hole and was trying to figure out
how I got here  and then I felt a huge hit it was like a earthquake my feet
were glued to the ground as I had my hand to the side of my body
balancing my body so I don't fall over then I seen a big crack in the
ground coming towards me so I ran to my right and it was still coming for me
I  ran to my left it was still coming after me so I ran towards it and was
balancing over it and jumped to the side and i slipped and then got up
and ran and I was still following me so I jumped into another hole and
it stopped I got up and got out and ran it wasn't chasing me anymore.
So I kept running and I felt another crack and I came to a stop and planted
my feet to the ground and balanced my body with my arms to my left and
right on took a huge leap and hit my head and blacked out for about 3
minutes I woke up and started blinking to get my vision back I was in a
hole on the moon I pulled myself up looked around to see if I could see
any cracks  I didn't see any so i pulled myself up and got out of the hole
and started walking around to think about how I got here and I saw  a
rocket ship and  the door was wide open I climbed inside to see what
was in there and I saw a phone I turned it on but it didn't have  any
reception so I continued to look around 

scratch jam

hey bloggers today we had Emma a  computer specialist she taught us how to make a game on scratch jr the sprite is the character and we need to debug witch means fix all the problems

 100% looking ford to doing this again let  me know  by leaving a comment byeeeeeeeeeeeee

The force

Hello we have been using story board that  go check the link out we have been reading a book each group has a different book my group had a book called the force we have been focusing on our characters emoticons   

this is what i have done let me know what you think by leaving a comment have a good day byeeeee

present

hello we are writing  about a film named the present this is my writing let me know if you like it by leaving a comment thanks for reading my blog have a good day the reasons there highlighted yellow is because there verbs

reading blog post

Hello Bloggers this is my blog post about my reading i will be showing you about my blue box. its a sheet of questions and you put your answers on to a google slide-this is where you put  your answers

  thank you for reading my blog